What do you think of my report?

[infiniphunk]

Here is a report I did for a technical writing class at school. Its about dual-booting! What do you think??

its in pdf, you can find it
here (http://my.tbaytel.net/mcmaster/report/)

[serz]

I don't have the time to read it right now. The only thing I can note is that that Grub splash is great!!

[Parcival]

Here are my suggestions, don't know if they'll be helpful for you or not. My style of publishing is a weird mix of US and German styles. :)

In your glossary, make sure to format the paragraph's hanging indents more carefully so they look all the same.

Don't center the text in the introduction.

Make a bigger indent for your quoations of the Kernel Archives on page 2 so they are more clearly set appart from the rest of the text. The last sentence on page 2 poorly wraps ("system capable").

page 3: "anyone the right to use"

Figure 2 and 4: space missing after the .

General remarks:

- I would post hyperlinks as footnotes in the document.

- Make the hirarchy of your titles better recognizable. They (mostly) display in the same style although they greatly differ (e.g. "The Boot Loader" has the same styling as "Conclusion", although the first is a subcategory). Also make sure that everything in your table of contents shows up in your text body with the exact same wording/spelling and vice-versa.


Great paper. :)

[infiniphunk]

Parcival, Thanks for your feedback!!! Your suggestions are well appreciated.

Serz, I'm glad you like the Grub graphic; I wish I could take credit for it. I got that screenshot at http://www.thecybersource.com/

BTW, I forgot to mention that this was done entirely with Open Office.org 2.0 beta. Overall very easy to use, just a couple glitches along the way.

[Frown]

I havent read it whole yet, but just a little note: In the glossary you say that one gigabyte is one thousand megabytes, and one thousand-million bytes, that is not exactly true. One gigabyte is 2^10 ( = 1024) megabytes and 2^10 * 2^10 * 2^10 ( = 1073741824) bytes.
To see I'm not making this up:
http://www.google.com/search?q=one+gigabyte+in+bytes
http://www.google.com/search?q=one+gigabyte+in+megabytes

[sharth]

i was skimming it...

You mentioned the apache was the "linux webserver", which isin't completly true... It's the most common, but that doesn't mean that it's the definative...

But more what I'm concerned about is that you are equating apache's stability with linux's stability in general. Those apache stats also include windows installations of apache, and solaris installations of apache.

But eh, other than that, good from the skimming... and the point seems to be more of a how to dual-boot, not convince to run linux / whatever anywho.

[tecknophreak]

Originally posted by serz
I don't have the time to read it right now. The only thing I can note is that that Grub splash is great!!

+1 how bout it!!

[infiniphunk]

eh, thanks again for your feedback guys! Yeah, I know I make some generalizations that, to us, are gross over-generalizations, but this is just for a second semester technical writing class:D So yeah, I'm aware there is also apache for windows, solaris, the BSD's, but that wasn't the point. The reason for the presentation was to make a dual-boot HOWTO that I could get marks at school for.
The idea was to present the main points to people who have only ever experienced Windows and nothing else.
But yeah, I'd really like to know how to take a screenshot of the bootloader(without using a camera; is it possible?) hmmmm....

I handed in the finished product today!

Thanks again for your help!

[sharth]

most screenshots of it i believe are taken by using a program like virtual pc or vmware.

[Fryguy8]

I read it, skimmed is more like it. I got a bad taste in my mouth with some of the stuff in the preface and introduction. Seemed a bit like you were taking some cheap shots at windows at some points. Didn't feel objective enough to me. I dunno, just my opinion. Also, one other thing that stood out was grub detecting windows and adding it automatically. This isn't true, the installer itself does it, it's not specific to grub.